It’s really late, and I should probably be in bed, ready for my social exam tomorrow, but I just had to write about something. I just remembered something when I was looking out of the window. I stayed in Goa for two years when I was very young, barely 6, and don’t really remember much. But I have flashes sometimes, especially when I hear some songs, which I had first heard in Goa. I just had one like that, and wrote a poem, subconsciously. I didn’t even see what I was writing. Been a long while since I wrote a poem. Anyways I’m posting it here.
I’m sitting by the window,
Looking out at the grey skies and busy street
My mind wanders
And I feel something stir
In my farthest memories
I close my eyes
I’m in another time and place
I see clear blue skies,
Going on as far as I can see
I see green fields and meadows
When I walk a distance,
I see a beach
The waves gently caressing the smooth white sand
Palm trees swaying in the breeze
My heart’s the only thing that’s beating
It was a place I had once lived in years ago
And had to leave when I too young to understand,
That I was in heaven
Something pushed back to the edge of my memories
By the meaningless hustle of busy life
When I open my eyes,
I’m back in hell
Why do all good things come to an end?
Very well written…loved ur portrayal of that scene….was good…u r creative… good…keep it going…keep writing…u ll get better with time…
Introduce more similies or metaphors….that beautify those poetic lines
hey! i just got your comments on my blog and i’ve come to say hello.
get this, emerson spartz and i actually have the same birthday!
you like twilight too? cool.
nice poem by the way. i can never get mine to rhyme like that.
wow!!!!!!!!!keep writing its a pleasure to read your blog